Mina
Billy Corgan's got a new track on iTunes called Mina Loy. I haven't bought it yet, but from previewing it, it sounds just like something off Machina. That makes me like it better then Zwan already.
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I'm a little burned out on Billy Corgan, lately. Too bad, because the Pumpkins were a lot of fun. He's just been repeating himself too much in my opinion. Sort of like Radiohead did with Kid A and Kid B. Anyway, here's the link for the re-written version of The Straight Man, which, in my humble opinion, could use a title change. I really think the other script was a lot better and told a far tighter story which resolved itself more satisfactorily, but that's just my two cents. This version ain't shabby either. I'm glad to see that whatever type of constraints and genres you tackle, you always come up with something solid, Brock. You should definitely pursue writing as much as possible. Here's the link: http://www.thegovernormovie.com/thestraightman.htm
Billy: I followed the Pumpkins around the country, took pilgrimages to Chicago, hung out with Billy's friends, even met the man himself... and I am burned out, too. I'm always floored by his ability to churn out songs and interesting lyrics, but I've moved on musically.
Title: I'm down with any good title. I like Brock's original title. It doesn't apply to this story, but, what the heck, I think a somewhat confusing title would be interesting. Plus, any title will look better in Italian.
Script: The other script was better and told a better story, but this is a script we can actually shoot, so that's a good thing. It's a little long-winded, all the lines won't make the final cut, but there is no reason our Director's cut can't be longer and include more.
The metaphorical talk is very mixed, thrown out, moved onto another, then going back to the first. I like the metaphors, but I think we need to pick a single metaphor and really explore every nook and cranny of it.
Hey, I'll pony up for the rental car so we can change that beaten up Sedan Deville to a slick black European sports car. :)
Good work, Brock.
Bonus: I talked to the Manager at Tuccetti's today and he's game to let us use the patio, pretty much anytime we want it. It's closed for the summer, anyway, so we won't be in anyone's way. We have our cafe location.
Thanks Ray. Writing is my big goal, for sure. And thanks for helping me revise. You did a good job.
Josh, you still have to write your screenplay. :) I know you're busy with work though, so take your time. I still want to see your pure, unfiltered view of the idea.
Same for Gabe. I'm excited to see what he's come up with.
I'm pooped.
Brock, I'm not looking for a shortcut, but can I work from your screenplay at this point? You've basically encapsulated all the elements we talked about. Is that cheating?
It isn't cheating, but at the same time, I feel like you should stay true to the vision you have in your head. You can write three pages out better then I can -- I always end up with 7.
I may have the elements, but I'm throwing my slant on them. It was your idea anyway. I only wrote this because Gabe was writing one also and I didn't want to seem like I never do anything at MoC.
But hey, if you want to, that's fine. Maybe you can just take my screenplay, cut out what you want, and get 3 pages. Whatever works for you.
Actually, the beat up Deville was my idea. Brock originally had a sleek sports car, but I thought that wasn't as interesting. Sorry! I feel like I'm meddling too much with your projects. Feel free to discard any/all of my ideas. Let's keep this kitchen free of extra cooks.
I agree about my mixed metaphors by the way, Josh. I get too carried away sometimes. Whenever I write something like, "the dull thud of his boots on the carpet were reminiscent of that of an ailing heartbeat", I must be reigned in! Hehe. That's what I get for starting out with prose.
Hey, can I use that "dull thud" thing? :)
Brock, you do have a natural knack for the six to seven page screenplay, it seems. It's sort of where you come in every time. It comes from all the vivid descriptions. I don't have enough depth yet to go on that long. I think I need to go read Nine Stories again and get some focus.
Yeh, I guess I'll start over, but you really captured some very important things.
Well, I took a trip to Barnes & Noble tonight looking for gifts for Chase... and I found the metaphor for this screenplay. More on that soon.
I'm glad you're starting over. I may have captured some very important things, but you're the one to tell the tale. And if you've found the metaphor, then by all means...write.
Nine Stories is a good story to give you focus. It's very specific and directed. I love that book. But, I'm also a fan of Franny and Zooey.
Yeah, 7 pages seems to be my magic number at the moment. I could shorten it down like I did with The Remorseful, but something gets lost in the translation. Those descriptions have a lot of heart put into them.
Nine Stories is a great book, but I have an odd sensation every time I see the word "Bananafish". I sort of want to skip over that story in each re-reading.
Have you guys ever read In Cold Blood? I found it a perfect example of how to use wonderfully evocative description that is at the same time, kept largelly clinical. But then again, I think the whole point of Truman Capote choosing such an unremarkable story to tell was to show the rest of us how engrossing it could be made when he infused his talent into it.
Show off!
Josh: As per my line about the heartbeat -- I think you meant it facetiously, but it's hard to tell if it's sarcasm when it's written, hehe. In any case, feel free to use it, if only to say, "here's an example of a really lame metaphor". However, if you do use it, you'd be quoting, because it's already in print form.
I actually haven't read that. I'll have to check it out. I'm always on the look-out for good prose to engross myself into. A fine screenplay helps most of the time, but I always seem to go back to prose. I could learn a clinical application to apply to my visceral style. Maybe I should go and pick that up...
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